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i can see the stars in your eyes,
the polymerization of nebulae within;
and though the sun has yet to rise
and the wishes yet to fall
the planets in your eyes never cease 
their spin

ii.
do you suppose the planets above
are in love with the stars?
that love is something the heavens are barren of
seems improbable to me thus far

iii. 
i can't break out of my orbit around you
you are truly the center of my world;
((if they could, 
then would the planets feel this too?))

iv.
i wonder if galileo had ever felt this 
did his heart beat fast as he gazed at the skies?
because this feeling seems like too much to miss-
and there is no more room for logic,
for "how's" or "why's."

v.
you put on your cassiopeia crown
and don orion's belt-
i pale in comparison to you,
but to you i am bound.

vi. 
i love you,
though you're so far from me now
do my broken thoughts get through
or is it just a vacuum i'm talking to?



i refuse to give up on rhyming.

aphelion (n.) the point in the orbit of a planet or comet where it is farthest from the sun.
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KaiserWolff Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
wow, aha, this is amazing.
the second and third sections especially.
i think i'm in love with the line - "do you suppose the planets above are in love with the stars?"
this poem's like perfection.
kudos to you!
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chocominte May 27, 2013  Student General Artist
2 cool
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Sammur-amat May 9, 2013   General Artist
awwh, this gave made me feel fuzzy all over :love:
beautifully executed rhyme, sugar! :huggle:
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cmwriteart Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I kinda feel bad about my poems now....compared to yours. ;_____;

Derp, yours should really turn into a song.
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SolarumNyx Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
mine really aren't that great though ; w ;

and it's not the right meter for a song anyways o:
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RoseScarlet Apr 26, 2013  Student Writer
AMAZING OMG
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SolarumNyx Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
IS IT REALLY BECAUSE RHYMING :iconcryforeverplz:
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RoseScarlet Apr 26, 2013  Student Writer
huh
wut up with :iconcryforeverplz: icon
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StarryDarkBlue Apr 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
i somehow felt that this poem was very distant,but not too blurred out. I liked the describing words who decorated the sentences like twinkling stars surrounding the planets around us.

your poems are always so beautiful <3
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SolarumNyx Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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